Jesse

Hello. I loved the wording decision mostly and the story in general. Not too often you read about a crush who has a flaw such as being shy. Usually they ...

Hey, thanks for writing Well done :), you've got me interested already. You've hit the setting right and are Acing writing about the chase. There are a couple things i ...

Hi, thanks for writing :) Well I'm sure most of us can relate to the two characters, but i found them a bit undeveloped. A nice little read, I liked ...

Hey, thanks for writing. I thought your story was very good. I found that there was a dreamlike quality tied in, it made this story all the better. The goth ...

Hey Eimer, thanks for the read, I'm sure we can all relate to the narrarator, one way or another. You've got the start of a very interesting story here. The ...

Very good. But what does the sky look like? Is there a nuclear bomb coming for America, or a giant meteor? Is the Sun about to burn out? This was ...

Howdy. That was a great read, not what i was expecting when i clicked the title, but interesting nonetheless. I really enjoy this little culture your creating. You've got some ...

I really liked this. Its not that I didn't see it coming, but i haven't read something like this in a long time. It was a good storyline. But if ...

Very good! I liked it lots. It seemed more like a song to me than a poem somtimes though. Just with the way that the stanzas kept changing in size. ...

K im gonna start reading and just review as i go along. "NO!" Tarah huffed, her emotions pouring. I didnt like the word pouring here "No! Get away from me!" ...

As soon as i read this i thought about that one person for me. I got over her now anyway. Thank god :) haha. All I have to say is ...

Ill start off with the compliments. Your imagery is crazy good, I just started reading not to long ago, but this is the best Ive seen yet. That first paragraph ...

Hey, I started reading through and became more interested than i planned on being this late at night. Im gonna sit down tomorow after school and read through all of ...

This was very heartfelt and sincere it seems. By dropping a few sentences here and there and changing a couple words around it could look more professional. Dropping the last ...

Heavy German accents coated their deep voices. The only thing i didn't go for was your word choice here.I just think of Heavy to be a old man kind of ...