Jenthura

Wow. That was amazing. I'm sorry about putting up yet another one of those, 'I have no review or critique here but I'm gonna say ZOMG about your writing anyways ...

Aiyee, sorry about that. I meant to put it into the short stories. Big mistake, sorry. I'll see if I can ask someone to move it...

Thanks ya'll for the comments and reviews. Shishu, it is meant to be reviewed. Shub, thanks for those points, I'll rework this...

I promise to do a really, really big review...but not now. Later, later.

Alright, so I've edited the prologue.

Thanks so much for the reviews, guys, but I discovered that I accidentally posted this chapter twice on YWS. I erased this one ( I can't find the delete button ...

Oops, it's not meant to be titled 'Prologue'. Thanks for the reviews, anyway. :)

Wow, guys, thanks for the reviews. I never had so many (or a star, Asxz) I've put the next chapter up, but it's somewhat...blocky. Anyway, your points were all very ...

Hey, Asxz, I read the first part, but was not aware of a second or even third part. I'd love to do a review, but I haven't the time, maybe ...

Thank June, I actually meant to leave it singular; something I've seen done in English literature, and decided to input here. I agree that it's rather clogged-up around the part ...

Wow, that's...unique. I'd never do such a thing -your mercaneries' bullets can stay where they are- but I'm not discouraging you. Go ahead!

lol, that's really rambling, but a good way to drain your brain of creativity. I like the way you compared it to fat being drained.

Dude, your teacher rocks, I wish my teacher would want me to write depressing stuff. lol

Thanks all for your compliments, thank you especially KikiSaysRAWR! (yes, I copied and pasted that) for your extensive review, I will edit vera, vera soon.

Thanks Teh, but I'm not gonna make fun of you. Notebook stickers 4ever!!! Woot woot! LOL