Jenthura

Someone mentioned her appearance, and you replied back, asking for clarification on what we wanted to be described. I’ve compiled a list of your descriptions of the freak to help ...

[[Invaded My Mind]] What's with the brackets? And now,Look at Me. You need a space after the comma, and 'Look' doesn't need to be capitalized. If i could only take: ...

Hmm, very...intriguing, but where's the plot? The story? If you mean to continue it, then you should put a small note about that. By itself, it's not a very interesting ...

Hey there, you've got something good here. You have suspense building up and the poor guy's thoughts in the background and then, just when you're really expecting something from all ...

Is that little guy falling or bowing? Cuz he should be bowing. I love this poem, especially the way the stanzas grow longer as the rain gets stronger (weird, that ...

Awesome! I loved The Giver, that was a great book. Anyways, You mentioned many things already from the book. Like Jonas remembering how Gabe would have been released. I really ...

Alright, pretty good, except that you mentioned a stage in the beginning. it confuses me, because by the end you're explaining things as if it were a movie (silhouettes and ...

There were multiple spelling errors (I don't know weather to believe her. -> "whether") and sometimes grammatical. However, your characters were very well made, Jolee especially. However, in the begin

Hey Ben, one problem you had (and I'm quite shocked nobody else picked up on it) is your 'it's'. It's means "It is", and you had it in the title ...

Very captivating, except for two points I think you should change. The repetitive-ness of the "Go you safe..." lines are good, but you make it happen twice right after each ...

Hi there, Skut (mind if I call you that? :wink: ) This wasn't took well at all Taken, it needs to be taken. I've noticed this same problem several times ...

Hi there, Bahadors, I'm going to (try) to be your reviewer. King Midas liked gold very much, A God granted him the golden touch. With his new power, he was ...

Quite good, you've got some grammar problems there, such as the "Alright class..."where you should have a comma between 'alright' and 'class'. I didn't notice any spelling errors, but I ...

Hmm, you're right, the part where Watson is deducting and turning around and all that is a bit weak. I was so sure ...Once it was all clear as day ...

Wow! You really captured me, held me tight and wouldn't let go till the end! Your style of writing offers quite a lot to me, as a reader, and goes ...