Jennya

Lovely poem. A great piece of narrative poetry. I loved the idea of concept and the placement of dialogue in italics within your poem, really gave it an original touch. ...

Hello, I have come to review. Now the first thing I noticed was the strange structure. You seem to jump from short one word lines to a whole big paragraph. ...

Hello, I can't literally hear you :smt002 but I'm getting you loud and clear. But never the less a nice little intro, I don't know if your talking about yourself ...

I'm planing to read your other chapters so I might as well give the first one a review. Okay first sentences are important. Your first sentence is quite good. I ...

Hey I have come to review! Don't be afraid to post the worst you can get is some good old constructive criticism. I quite like the start of this, nice ...

Wow, quite a nice sweet little poem. Nice and small, because of its size and simplicity I can't really say much. The grammar seems sound and so is the flow ...

Hey I have come to review. Don't worry about mistakes, its understandable :). My novels are littered with bad grammar. Its quite long so my review might tapper off. Just ...

Firstly welcome to YWS! Hopefully you will like it here. If you ever need a review drop me a line. In kind on kind the mood for critique so here ...

Hello, This is quite a nice poem, I really quite like it. I love your repartition of 'This is a meditation' it connects the stanzas while separating them at the ...

Hello Reviewing again. Just a random pointer, make all your posts into one novel it really helps put things together plus you can write a synopsis and have a cover ...

Hello, come to review for review day. I like the start of this nice and simple, it goes well with your characters voice, not saying your character is simple. Your ...

Hello its review day and I said I would come back to review part two, so here I am. I love the start but i feel that the sentence doesn't ...

Hello, It's review day I was originally going to review chapter 2 but since I'm here I might as well do the prologue as well. The beginning has a nice ...

Hey, I have come to review! I'm a little reviewed out so my review might not be up to scratch. Personally I think you should have posted the prologue and ...

This a pretty fantastic start. I read your plot outline and it defiantly sounds original but its prepares a little to hard to understand, the terms like 'Inteligemental' can stump ...