Jennafina

Interesting images. It seams very floaty, like wind. One thing though. Possibilities blossom, curling roots extend lightning zings as my mind sings everywhere and everyone will hear this call. You ...

Here I am again! Actually, this time though I have a few things. The old lady began to come to the rescue, trudging slowly on her crippling legs. Maybe you ...

Wow, thats good! I couldn't find anything to crit either. It all seems so... Perfect! I love how it starts slow, and gets faster and faster. Ness felt her body ...

Is the girl Athela? I like how you put the ending in the begining. Just me though. I don't think it gives anything away, bucause it doesn't make sence untill ...

I thaught it was good dispite the lateness (or earlyness) of the hour where you live. Insperation often strikes late at night. Posibly all the muses have floated away from ...

It all depends on which books. book two of the lord of the rings was exeptionally dull. It spent like eight paged discribing Erond's ears. Actually not really, but I ...

I basicly agree with everyone, especially the last part. Where hearts are never b r o k e n & tears are never cried. Welcome to my perfect life. Did ...

I think its ok, It is a bit repetitive though on the happyest days of my life part, and some of the rhymes seam a bit pushed.. Incandecence, I love ...

Did you know that more people have died in auto accidents because theyre not flying than died when the plains hit? For your research, my mom took me into the ...

I LOVE IT!!! Thats awesome!! Its sweet and funny and sad and cool yah.... I Love band geek stories, being one might have somthing to do with it.. :) Have ...

I like all the imagery, especially in the begining about the needle. Its really cool how you do a verse and then a little line at the end that sortof ...

As with most poems, I like this but I dont understand it. Alone and drinking with split personalities, all of them addictive, yet still erratic in wrong circumstances. This sounds ...

I really like your story so far, and I am really looking forward to the next chapter, but there are just a few things.. They came towards me, yielding their ...

I really like this. Its short and fast paced and confuseing. I haven't read any other vampire stories, so I dont know the standard, but it seams really good. It ...

Your story is cute and short and sweet!! I like it! Its got lots of cool descriptions, I like how you compare the water to the color of slate. I ...