Jennafina

I like the imagry also, and the title grabbed me. The wallet simily was my favorite also, except maybe for this... She sent the wave, the massive tsunami, I like ...

Intstead of making another induvidual post, you can edit your previous posts by clicking the little edit button in the top right hand corner. Hope that helps! The writing in ...

I like this. It has a sad, contemplative edge. It feels very distant, like you're watching your life through a window, or.. a mirror! The word choice is simple, yet ...

LOL! That is so awesome! At first I thaught it would be one of those generic cutting and suacide stories, but then you put a very funny twist on it! ...

The fire had died long ago but he still contemplated, he saw ember upon ember fade away, and now he was alone. The last part of this sentence, and now ...

I like how each stanza half-way rhymes with the one before it. It gives it a nice flow, like a curvy line, or ripples. If that makes sense, lol. It ...

Hmmm.. I liked this. It was quiet, and gentle, and even though it didn't have any magic or anything, it had a fairy-tail like quality. Just a few things... This ...

Wow, this was great! I love how you've invented a format. Free verse really suits you! Few things: You like all others start as a lovable baby. I think you ...

Hey, I don't know how old this is, but here I am. Your poem made me cry the first time I read it. It really, really hit home for me. ...

Wow, longness, lol. As usual, won't be able to do it all at once. She would be married at twenty two and bear a child at twenty five. If you ...

Hmmm... A few things. First paragraph: please, please, please add more paragraphs. ‘It must have been terrible’ I thought turning on the TV again. Add commas after terible, and thought, ...

Omg, that was seriously the best story I read. Write more. Ha, ha ha. Only kiddin'! But I am using your guide on your own story. I already like the ...

WOah graphic... It certainly earned its rating. One or two things. 1. Whats a cunt? *blushes* 2. I slump to the floor with life ebbing out of me. Just before ...

That is confusing.. My headmaster kept his promise. He is now in jail, far away, and he can’t come near my mother and I again. You jump to he, right ...

Ok. Rrright.. Please excuse my picky but poor critiqueing skills! As you requested, here I am, glad to help. :) The day started like any other with the sun rising ...