Jennafina

My favorite stanza is the fourth one too. I like how you discribe the snowflakes falling, and the barrier. Want to know something sad? Snip Snip isn't making any of ...

Marcus looked in into her sparkling green eyes, as he sat propped up in his hospital bed. Maybe just into? 'In into' seems a little repetitive. “I love you you ...

I liked how Ashley kept remembering what Kevin was like as a boy. It seemed to give your story... depth? I also really liked the song. So sad. :( And ...

Nice rhyming! :) A Land where man walk free as the brisk breeze, I think if you took out the brisk, and changed man to men it would flow better. ...

..... *stares in stunned awe* I loved this from the begining! And the ending works out perfectly, too. I kind of guessed they'd stick with it. Congrats at finishing! If ...

The four rock. I loved it when they stood back to back, it was really.... I don't know... Powerfull? I've read all the ones up to here, but havn't been ...

YAY! Go Max! “I thought you were my friends,” Max was yelling, quieter now. “Friends aren’t supposed to treat each other like this.” ^This doesn't make sense... Camael stepped out ...

Hello, again! A long hallway was straight ahead of them, and the four progressed through it blindly. The hallway was more like a tunnel, complete with dirt walls. Water trickled ...

Wow! That was your best chapter yet! Seriously! (In my humble opinion, of course, lol.) I lived the mention of sleep telekenisis, that was really funny. The teacher charecter seems ...

Me too! (But you know that, of course, lol.) Its really late here, so if these don't make sense.. its not my fault... (JK) Jonas was now fully formed on ...

Camael's dramatic entrence through this gaping hole in the ground sure is an anticlimax, lol. When I finished chapter eleven, I was sure it was going to be some monster. ...

Wow! Thats amazing! :D I don't know what to say that hasn't already been said. Except this: “Maybe she really does,” One says, glancing out my eyes and then moving ...

This chapter explained alot. I like how the eyes change color when they use their gifts. Each color seems to fit the person's personality. Suddanly, the prologue makes more sense. ...

I liked this chapter alot. It showed how well the four work together. I also was glad you focused on Landon, who is my favorite, next to Ness. I like ...

Okay, I'm back! Sorry, I havn't been keeping up. “Will you let me explain already?” Camael interrupted. “Jeeze, you mortals are so impatient.” “Oh…jeeze, don’t do that,” the angel said