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Gah. I love/hated this one. It was like waaaay too romantic and waaaaay too short. What was it? 162 pages? I finished it in like an hour. *rolls eyes* Fang ...

Hey, I think I love this version even more. It's awesometastico. In the last version, I don't think you killed off darling dear but maybe my memory is failing me. ...

Hey, Since this seems to be in a Medieval time period, I would recommend putting it in the History forum or Fantasy forum. :) I don't really like Medieval time ...

Hey, Lol, as ususal I like it. I can definitely see this becoming a novel. I like the character Mona and the cafeteria scene but this would have been the ...

Hey, This was much, much better. I think that this might have been your best chapter format wise. I think that you aren't giving us the insight that we got ...

Hey, I like the panic attack at the end but as I said before you rushed into this way to fast. You should describe the room and her feelings more, ...

Hey, Welcome to YWS! As Violet said, the first part completely ruins the story. You just gave us the intro and conflict in five sentences. I can't even read this ...

Hey, Maybe I'm weird or something, but I don't get it. Is this something that happened to you? Did you find this letter? Is it the beginning to another story? ...

Hey, So everyone got the grammar and such so I'm just here to say that I liked the repetion but maybe you over did it a little. Other than that, ...

Hey there! Guess you got my PM ;D So, as I said before I really like this. The character is believable, the flow is great and it's a very good ...

Hey, Wowzers. I swear, once you finish this, you'll have agents begging for them to publish it for you! This flows great and once again, I didn't find any mistakes. ...

Hey, Here for chapter two. I am so jealous of your writing talents. You're amazing. Trust me :) There really wasn't much to say about this. I think the crying ...

Hey, What a vivid dream! This grabbed me in and hooked me like you were the fisherman and I was the fish! There were some graammar mistakes but I saw ...

I'm sure lots of people have told you this (34) but this is really great! I love your take on personified (Is that a word?) version of fire! FIDDLESTICKS. That ...

Hey there, Saw this on my brand spanking new feed and couldn't wait to read it. I have to say (Well, duh. I'm reviewing your work. Obviously, I have to ...