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Hi dallythejester :) This is such a simple poem, but at the same time that's what gives off its uniqueness, as it feels it doesn't need fancy words or gritty ...

Thanks very much, It's good to have some proper constructive criticism, I'll certainly take yr advice on board, once again thank you! :) x

Thank you for yr comment, I understand the mistakes I've made and it was merely teething troubles, I was rushing that night too trying to get a first accomplished short ...

Plus don't switch genres mid way through, It muddles up the novel, It's like yr story doesn't know what to be, it starts off as possibly a suspensiful horror, then ...