The first thing i want to say is good job. This is a poem that gets right down to the point in a way that is easy to understand. That is why i am going to review it.
First, I agree with MiddleEarthGal. You should probably cap King, Him, He, and His.
On the other hand, My favorite stanza was "In his eyes we flourish in our eyes he fades"
This really sets up that He cares about us, but in our eyes, we don't think about Him that often.
Another stanza that i really enjoyed was "When all fails we blame Him when all succeeds we praise Him"
This makes us realize that we tend to blame God when something bad happens and praise Him when good things happen. It makes us realize that we sometimes just want good things, and that is why we "stay" with God.
This is a very nice poem. I love it. I think it is very good, with a very good subject.
Points: 284
Reviews: 2
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