JabberHut

I like your story very much! (sorry for the late comment. Dang chatroom!) I'm excited for more. There were only a couple things I discovered. Kwest brought the Dagger to ...

This was wonderful. It definitly kept going. Very nice! Continue it and let me know when you've made the next part! I honestly have no comments here, except to keep ...

K, I'm not good at critiquing poems and songs and stuff. However, I did like your work here. When I read the second song, I got a bit lost. I ...

Wow. I really like this story! You did an awesome job in writing it. I have only a couple comments to make. I can't wait for some more! Maybe Mom ...

Hi, Saphira! Remember me? I dunno if you do or not, but here I am and I thought I would critique your story. :D Soldiers poured out of every door, ...

Very well written! I liked it! She made her way to the bar. The barman wiped the tabletop and didn't look up. I may be a bit picky, but I ...

I'm getting into this story, really! I like how you ended in that cliffhanger. I do that all the time, keeps people wanting more! lol. Cammie and I instinctively looked ...

Oh, I liked it! You're slowly improving on the details, I'm impressed. It could still use some more. There is not much else to say, except keep it going! I'm ...

You got a good thing going here, ninja! I'm excited! I know you'll hate me for saying this, cause everyone covered it, but it could use some more detail. it's ...

Very nice! I liked it. Knowing Star Wars and how they do the summary in the beginning, i think the prologue works wonderfully. Because this galaxy had contact with Star ...

Greetings, my friend! Well, because I'm a bit bored, I thought I would read your story, and I loved it! However, I did notice some mistakes, and take to consideration ...

I liked it a lot. I like how you left those ends loose yet just tight enough for me to want to read more and get the answers. You got ...

I agree, just be a bit more descriptive with your writing and you're good to go. I liked it, however. Never give up! Always keep moving forward! :) Shadow pretty ...

Good poem, buddy-ol'-pal. I agree that the poem does not flow. I'm not too good with poems, so correct me if I'm wrong or if I'm missing something. There is ...

Pretty good, my good friend! 'A is for a awesome leader'--it's AN awesome leader 'S is for sword of the Jedi'--sword or saber? 'O is for obvious daughter of Han ...