JabberHut

Hello, Alice. ^_^ This was very good. I didn't read the first to stories and I thought it was good. The ending was very abrupt. A little more drama, more ...

Greetings, Ash! Let's see how much story I can tear up here...:wink: I looked down at my papers that were covered in a warm glow from the candle next to ...

Hello, Z! It's been a while, so we'll see how much I remember. Just then, two of the five policemen were brutally shot down by streams of red laser bullets. ...

Hello! Here to critique upon request and desire. ^_^ The first thing I noticed was how uncomfortable it was. Right away, you start with a pronoun. That's not good. I ...

Hi! Here to tear your story apart. ^_^ The touch of cold metal reassured her that whatever these men had in store for a lovely young women foolish enough to ...

Hi! Here to tear up your poem, though there isn't much to tear up. ^_^ To cry, without crying- not one, single tear. That hyphen in there threw me off. ...

Hi Pendragon! ^_^ Thought I'd stop by and take a peek. I didn't read the old version at the top, btw. I'm just jumping down here. I hope you don't ...

Hiya! ^_^ I'm trying to get back into the habit of critting, so I'm more than happy to crit if you need anything critiqued. ^_^ I’m usually a grammar nut ...

Hello! You don't know me, but I'm willing to help you improve. If I say anything harsh, PM me please. I don't mean to be mean at all. I only ...

*sigh* I haven't been on YWS for a while now, haven't critted in...a while. :lol: Haven't wrote anything to my story either. Just been too busy. But, now, I'm starting ...

Wow, you didn't get any crits on this? You mean, I'm the first one?? Woot! *feels special* Dashing through corridors of reinforced steel, the two renegades made their way towards ...

Didn't think more would come out so soon. :wink: Bear with me, I've had a long, busy day yesterday and not much sleep last night. Booker stepped from the taxi ...

Dang it, it's all gone! I pressed the wrong button and lost my crit. Now I gotta do it again. >_< It originally went along the lines of this: Sorry ...

Hey, you were talking about this, so I thought I'd take a look. It's really a good start. Don't give up! First, my favorite: Grammar! *waits for applause* *crickets, coughs* ...

Oh, goodie! #6! *begins to read* he saw the lack of windows in the house and blinds drawn on those it did have This is a bit chunky. Maybe change ...