Published November 28, 2007
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Did not catch any mice
So hats off!!
Loved it. I especially liked your poem because it's very meaningful and deep.
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I'm pretty sure the semi-colon's use is correct. Thanks a lot for the review!
Edit: By the way, the cop says the line.
Hiya! ^_^ I'm trying to get back into the habit of critting, so I'm more than happy to crit if you need anything critiqued. ^_^
I’m usually a grammar nut when it comes to poetry (‘cause I’m not good with poetry anyway, lol) but I have no problems with what you have here.
This may sound stupid (being the poem idiot that I am) but who says this? Or is this a type and the quotation ends before the “I thought” tag?
You probably know more than I (considering you’re older than me) but I wouldn’t use a semicolon here. Maybe it’s different with poems, but these two sentences are very well built to stand as separate sentences.
It was pretty good. At first, it sounded like he was a normal living being, but in the end it gives a chilling ending in saying he’s a ghost. I’m bad at interpreting poems (how’d I pass English class??) but this sounds good to me. ^_^
Keep writing!
Jabber