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Re: Him - #1
I call first dibs!! Yay, you took my advice! ^^ I could hear it, [no comma] so clearly. But waiting for what, [question mark instead] I thought. You can still ...
Feb 18, 2008 -
Re: A Story Pt 1
Hello, there! You must be new to YWS? Wonderful to meet you. :) Keep in mind there's some rules we like to follow to keep everything as organized as pleasant ...
Feb 18, 2008 -
Re: Without Your Love
Hello! Thought I'd stop by and answer your plea for a critique! :wink: “Alright class, I want you all to turn to one another and shake hands and welcome the ...
Feb 18, 2008 -
Re: All good things end
Hey, Blue Fairy! :) I had to stop my homework. It was giving me a headache, so I thought I'd give that crit I promised to do about...thirty minutes ago. ...
Feb 16, 2008 -
Re: The Tree of Life (Part One)
Hey, Kylan! It's about time I stopped by to more of your work. I hope I don't repeat anything in Gwen's really long crit up there. :shock: Lol, forgive me ...
Feb 15, 2008 -
Re: EverWayward #9
Hey, Aedomir! I got your critique finished, so here it is: The sparkling water, cast upon the morning grass , began to gleam a flamboyant orange, [no comma?] as a ...
Feb 15, 2008 -
Re: The Shallow King (A Set of Fantasy Quatrain)
Hello, love! It's been so long! I don't do much with this kind of stuff, so we'll see what I can come up with. :twisted: For seven years , the ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: EverWayward #8
Hey, Aedomir! I have no idea why it took my longer than it should have to find this. I tend to pull those dumb instances once in a while, so ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: The Mind Program Part 1 Chapters P-1
Hello, Church! I got your crit done, so here goes nothing! :D Prologue He Had Top-Secret code classification, but he was told this place made cleaning agents. Is there a ...
Feb 12, 2008 -
Re: In Thrall
Gyr! Yay, something to review by you! And it’s quite the long one, so my critique shall be just as long. :twisted: The meeting was already underway, of course, and ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Penny Sapphires : published!
Gyr! *pounces* It looks like you need someone to stop by and rip your story to shreds…:twisted: “Penny, you know better than that, [exclamation point or period] [s]how[/s] How many ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: The Bed of Debauchery
Hello! I noticed I had a critique for you sitting around, so I thought I’d post it. :) A little different [s]then[/s] than last time we met -- she [s]seems[/s] ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Hollow Lake : Taxi Ride (1)
Hi! I saw this and thought I’d pay a visit. :) Had someone told Johnny that “Can you please take Sandra Tscarediway to 57 Rosebend Avenue?” was a question to ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Clara's Diary entry 1-5
Oh em gee, hi! It’s been a long time! Thought I’d stop by to say hi and leave a critique behind. ^_^ I can hear her soft weeping beside me ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Sly as a fox
Hey, Night! I saw your work and I thought I'd pay a visit. :) In the distance , you could hear a faint whimpering, almost as if it were a ...
Feb 9, 2008
