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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Thanatos

    Professor Rabbit! Thank you so much for entering the CIA contest! Here's your critique for entering. If there are any issues downloading the file, PM me. I'll be sure to ...

    Aug 7, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Casting Shadows Prologue [Edited.]

    Heather! For your entering the contest, here is your bonus critique! I did all the critting in the Word Document. I apologize for any difficulties, and PM me if there ...

    Aug 7, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: x

    Rose! I felt like critting, and I decided to crit yours in the little time I have because you have a deadline to make. But I just noticed now that ...

    Jul 31, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: You and I

    Hello, Tadatori! :D I noticed your story here, and I thought I'd take a quick look here. ^^ Grammar and First Impressions Because it's so short, you'll get a good ...

    Jul 26, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Storm (revised)

    Easy! A beautiful thing has happened this night— [colon instead] the storm clouds moved in. I don't much like this second line. It's very weak and elementary compared to the ...

    Jul 26, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Daemon

    Easy! The daemon claws [s]at the[/s] at the closed door, Gurgling noises escaping [s]from [/s]her mouth. I'm gonna go with Blink here. I don't entirely understand why gurgling is capitalized ...

    Jul 19, 2008
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Slaughter-Man

    Mantis! I made an attachment with my critique. I have all the details in there, so I do hope you find some of it valuable or to your liking. ^_^ ...

    Jul 19, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: ...

    Grammar and First Impressions Jerome took a brief stroll through the crystalline soul of a major reptilian beast, sick with scurvy from lack of lake fronts to envelop. So that ...

    Jul 18, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: {Edited version of untitled story, suggestions welcome}

    Hi, Fire! I haven't critted in what seems like forever, so forgive me for anything that doesn't make sense. ^^ Grammar and First Impressions I pulled the fuzz off of ...

    Jul 17, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Paranoia, Ch.1 /P

    Brad! Grammar and First Impressions ...or else he'd be the little brother nobody remembered, and that was not happening. This was cute. xD Adults weren't always trustworthy, after all. Awesome. ...

    Jul 12, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Possession

    Es ist meinen Bär! *hugs* Grammar and First Impressions That ghost, Lillian’s grandma or not, is hurting us.” Does that sound like something Richard would say? " It is hurting ...

    Jul 10, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The ongoing Adventures of Bib Fickle

    :shock: ... ..... ... :shock: That was intense. [spoiler] Grammar and First Impressions This is a very general blah line-by-line. Mainly on commas. I can easily get more specific if ...

    Jul 7, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Boxes

    I was going to do this last night, but then my internet crashed. *cries* I'm feeling kinda bad right now, but I'm gonna crit like I said I would! *asks ...

    Jul 7, 2008
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Ouija Board

    3B! Haha, I'm gonna crit! I'm critting your work! :P You know you love me. :wink: Grammar and First Impressions Brianne and Roger both gasped , and Jen was frozen. ...

    Jul 2, 2008
  • Short Story » Fanfiction, General Re: Legend of Zelda: The Wings of Darkness

    Glad! It's been forever since I've read this. Hopefully what I comment on makes sense, and if it doesn't, shame on me. :P And because of that long crit you ...

    Jul 2, 2008


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— Rod Serling