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I'm not in the poetry section much, so I don't know how much help I can be here. From what I read, this was very good. Vivid, and such. (Like ...

I always like d those words, somehow. Like I could get them in my bones and stretch them out Your footsteps are the light ones, in long boots and sometimes ...

I really liked this. It seemed true and flowed very well, of course some of the wording wasn't perfect in places, but things hardly are. I loved the basis of ...

The bus pulled out from behind me and out of the school compound as I stared at the huge building before me that was Everfield Academy This is a little ...

The shade of blue in the sky darkened, as I walked deeper into the forest. You don't need a comma there, it's an unnecessary pause. As usual, I could not ...

If ashley hadn't already pointed everything out, I would have a lot more to say...but she did, so I don't... I really liked this short little section. It was short, ...

I feel somehow as if I am the only one who felt the the reading of The Host was a good waste of too much time. The book didn't start ...

Muse: Did you just critique in the form of a poem??? That is so interesting, and cool. I mean, I wasn't sure if it was a critique at first, but ...

sick-making Um...this isn't really a word, and reminds me a lot of Scott Westerfeld in the Uglies series. Not that that's a bad thing, it just stood out and I ...

So, the other's have pretty much pointed out everything I already saw, leaving me with nothing but praise, congrats! haha I loved how real this sounded, how true and from ...

like I was talking to a child not a boy that looked like he was at least ten years older than I. Overcluttered. Keep it simple, and try something like ...

This is a story that shall kinda play out with a phantom of the opera-e feel. Well harsh reviews welcome, my grammer and paragraphing skill suck but it is a ...

There was a lot of repetition in this, and while I like a lot of work I see a lot of the same things going on. A lot of repetition ...

Wow. That sounded really true and real, which is quite refreshing. You mannaged to point out the things that girls do a lot of because of self-image, or insecruity, and ...

I liked this, although it was too short to really form any true opinion of it. I would like to know a little more, even if it was just the ...