Irene

Deffinitly one of the best angsty "he loves me not" poems i've ever had the pleasure of reading XD On a more serious note, I loved the way you phrased ...

First off - this made me laugh so much I think its better suited to Comedy Short Stories (but that's just me personally). Good grammar and structure, it flowed nicely ...

I'm gonna assume this is during WW2? Nice little piece, simple and straight-forward, pretty good grammar over all -BUT I think that there isn't supposed to be a comma between ...

I am going to tell you this how I was told (by my uber-awesome at grammar and spelling and such cousin Nikita naturally) years ago and you WILL take this ...

*bows down* That's it, I officially acknowledge you as pure epicness! Welcome to the club :DD Loved the idea, made me laugh, i'm sure there were grammar mistakes in there ...