Insomnia

Hey, Saint. Another awesome chapter. Just a few nit-picks: The judge, a short but lithe Black woman Did you really need to capitalise black? Unless black means something else which ...

Hey, Jab. I never got around to critiquing this, and I think I owe you quite a few still, so... Mom strapped her into the car seat either refusing to ...

PERSON 1 I am awesome! Now, this is a very abrupt beginning. I suggest that you extend this to a rant of about sixty lines. It would also help the ...

Hey, Jamie. I don't think we've met before? Nice to meet you, if not. ;) This is a pretty good piece, probably a bit too short. Your descriptions are good, ...

Hey, Pengy. ^_^ This was actually really creepy. It's the sort of thing that's great from you. Yes, it's a compliment. :P There were just a few things that I ...

I envy writers like you. It seems like everything you write just comes out beautifully, no matter what it is. Describing is the most painful thing for me. :lol: I ...

Hey, Rabbit. Welcome to YWS. :S I hope you have a great time on here, and submit a heap of work. By the looks of it, you're a really good ...

Hey, 3B. How're you? :) You've done a good job here. It's a pretty cool concept, but like Prok said, I'm hoping you'll detail the plot more in the next ...

Hey, Yams. :D I've coem to take a look at the story for you, and I'm really impressed. You portayed your characters well, the emotion shone through - it was ...

Hey, Luc. Thanks for giving me an excuse to procrastinate. ;) People were able to turn of their heaters *off he paused, as though searching for her name in his ...

Hey, Luc. It's good to see you came back to this. Persistence is always good. xD I'll get right into the crit, because I know how impatient you are. ;) ...

Hey, Vern. You've created quite an interesting story here. Most of your problems lay with your punctuation and grammar, but they're important too, maybe even the most important. People who ...

I've just read Nineteen Minutes, which is by her. It's a story about a high school shooting. I like the plot and all, but the writing style was not good. ...

I can only echo what everyone else said, really, in saying that you managed to pack a lot of emotion into quite a compact piece. Your descriptions are great, but ...

Hey. :) This is really good for your first submitted story, but it could be majorly improved on. In the waning days of that dreadfully sticky summer, Roger slithered about ...