Insomnia

Hey, pop. :D You posted on my thread, so I'm here. I liked this piece a lot. It was entertaining, and your characters seemed realistic with the occasional exception. I ...

Hey, Kitty. :) Thanks for posting in my thread. Here's your critique. I could say it was the phone call that sweltering summer day when the clothes were drying on ...

Hey, Pengy. ^_^ You're the first commenter, so thank you. :P I'll get into this now. Excuse me if I seem a bit harsh. I blame sleep deprivation. You already ...

Hey. Moving onto the first chapter now, like I said. :P This was good. It added more depth to the characters and improved on the prologue a lot. I haven't ...

Hey. :) I was looking for something to review, and this caught my attention. It's quite a nice piece of work. I enjoyed reading it, and I'll be going on ...

Hey. :) I don't think I've read anything of yours before. That's the problem with disappearing for months. You don't know anybody anymore. XD On with the critique. This was ...

Hey. You're a new member, I see? Welcome to YWS. Hope you have a good time here. :) We have a rule here about posting your work. You have to ...

Rawr. So, I'm here for the third critique. I'm expecting that this one won't be as long. I'm going to write it as I go so I don't miss anything ...

Hey. :) I promised I'd give you a critique, so here I am. I'll try to be harsh. ;) I think if I had a knife, I could have sliced ...

Hi, Googly. I don't think we've met before. :) You've got something that has the potential to be a good piece here, but it seems a bit detached at the ...

Hey. You did a pretty good job with the descriptions in this. Sometimes you descend into telling instead of showing, but overall it's a good piece. Just a few things ...

Hey. I just noticed you post the third part of this, so I thought I'd come back to the first part of it. ...You may have asked me to read ...

Hey. Welcome to YWS. :) Your story would be better if you fleshed it out some more. Add some descriptions, some dialogue. If you're still working on it, wait until ...

Hey, Luc. Just got around to reading this. It may be my first propr critique in months, even though it'll probably be very short. I didn't find too much to ...

- Anything Jodi Picoult and/or Lurlene McDaniel. I love you for saying that. :lol: I read a book by Jodi Picoult called Nineteen Minutes. Everyone I ever talked to about ...