Incandescence

Amelia - Consider: Not even the lamp shuffling light from above could penetrate the darkness of our palms. Skip the change and close the frame: no longer do your feet ...

biancarayne, This will surely get you an A in your history or english class when discussing German literature. For my buck though, I can take any set of five lines ...

iQuippie-- Everything here is pretty standard descriptions of winter time. If you want to discuss seasonal emotions, find a more interesting set of statements than "snow fell down upon our ...

write_ma_hustle, I find this a very heavy meal to chew through. Lacking all human interest. What is it about? The monotony of making bad decision? What is of concern here ...

xImperfectlyPerfectx -- This is like fishing with dynamite. It completely misses the manufactured breathless quality of intoxication, though I thought the first line was a step in the right direction ...

PenguinAttack-- This was on life support until I got to "pelting wetness of storming rain," at which point I pulled the plug. This is overmodified fluff with no redeeming poetic ...

AmberAngst. This is junk. It's a poorly conceived, ineptly executed stream of gibberish that resembles millions of other pieces by beginners who reach for sentiment and come up empty. Read ...

Cameron: Dropping the first two lines is not detrimental--do it. "Man's own attempted chronicling" is too boring for a poem so light. "own" is needlessly repetitive anyway. A fine piece ...

Sureal, With the first three lines, the reader will abandon hope of finding a poem beneath them. If someone hobbled up to me in a bar and repeated them, I'd ...

Evangelina, Cut S2. I was not a fan of the mispunctuation at the beginning, i.e., "whispered winter deep / her roots planted...," which should have a comma at the end ...

Mad, What is this? Let's not kid ourselves here. Poetry is not a story with awkward linebreaks; at present, that's all I can manage through the rubble of this hopeless ...

hazel_eyes, Punctuating this (unless done with a shredder) is a waste of time. The solution: get a new sheet of paper. As opposed to weak descriptions of personality and vague ...

cymbeline_x, This poem's only accomplishment is its demonstration of your knowledge of the "Enter" key. The one-word lines neither invoke poetic reflection nor provoke a start-stop reaction that makes

iQuippie-- As with the other poems of yours I've read, this is a metaphor that has been drawn out longer than its Carbon-dating allows. In the future, you need to ...

order-- This reads like you somehow botched a trainwreck. The outpouring of images that lead nowhere, the repetition of "desire" (except, for no apparent reason, at the second to last ...