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This is interesting. I was a little confused, because the transitions between what happened in the past and what's happening in the present are not very clear. Perhaps you could ...

First, you made the text small which makes it hard to read. The place, Special to me, Is not a place seen with the eyes, But with the heart. I ...

First, the purple text in the middle threw me off while I was reading it. Can you put that in a spoiler text so that your reviewers can look at ...

The format of this looks interesting. I tried singing it out-loud and it sounded choppy to me. Did you have a specific melody in mind when you wrote this? If ...

And the plot thickens! (I always wanted to say that.) Calypso opened her sticky eyelids and blinked in the harsh morning sunlight. She started to stretch, but she was something ...

Now, things are getting interesting....I love your description of the pool. I'm confused about this part though. She crinkled her nose. "And you are a mess." Aphrodite touched the coarse ...

I am intrigued. There was one part that confused me though. She remembered the day they brought her here. It was a warm day, with some clouds here and there. ...

I like it! I like the fact that you had actual punctuaution in your poem. Many people don't. (I myself didn't until Lumi pointed it out. :D) I don't have ...

What would it be if the Earth turned not? These lines were confusing. Do you mean to say that the Earth is not rotating? If nothing grows old then nothing ...

As an intro, this is quite good. I am intrigued and want to read more. I sat on the couch of my own living room, in the apartment suite I ...

Did this take place in the past or does this take place in another country besides the U.S? I would like a little more detail about the background. I don't ...

Hey, your poem has very nice imagery. I think you should give us hints that something isn't right with the relationship before you tell us readers that it fell apart. ...

Oh, wow....There are a lot of countries that come to mind when reading this poem. But, I think you might be talking about the States because of the freedom part, ...

My first reaction to seeing this was "Ah! It's one big paragraph!" I have bad eyesight, so having things in one big paragraph makes it hard for me(and everyone else) ...

I like the imagery in this poem. Could you included a translation of the Latin below please? I think it might help us readers to understand the poem a bit ...