Icaruss

One more thing: when people say that it gets confusing, and they don't know who's talking... Don't listen to them. All they have to do is see who is talking ...

No, seriously. If someone didn't find this funny I have lost faith in mankind. Gerald Greenwizer, the recently appointed chief editor at the New York Times agreed. “In this day ...

Oh, how funny! He's gay! And why is this Rated R? Because there's gayness involved? Oh, lord.

Your character is a little brat. Other than that, it was fine. I don't know if I can call it interesting, I mean, it's only a paragraph long. But I'd ...

Thanks a lot. That's probably one of the most helpful crits I've ever gotten. But you got to keep in mind this is just the start of the storyline, so ...

Thanks a lot. That's probably one of the most helpful crits I've ever gotten. But you got to keep in mind this is just the start of the storyline, so ...

Bump? Come on, anybody want to give it a go?

This is awesome. Very easy to read, fluent. Not particularly important, but it still says I a lot. I loved it.

Here's some more. Although this post is essencially a bump. Come on, guys, give me some feedback. I know it's kinda dirty, and the language is filthy, but you can ...

Um... Bump?

Well, thanks for the comments. And, yeah, you probably haven't been looking enough, avidreader. There's a bunch of things with swearing, that are great in life. What I try to ...

The last part is the start of the story... Sorry. I just like to mix up the storylines. That's why the last sentence is the first --and that's why I ...

I'm supposed to pay up now, aren't I? Thanks for the crit. I corrected some of the things you pointed out. Like the missing question mark when Eddy starts to ...

Thanks for the comments. I corrected the "living" thing, first for pointing that out. I don't tend to re-read my stuff.

Damn you, Sophie! DAAAAAAAMN YOUUU!!! *ahem* Anybody else wants to give it a read?