HopelessAbandon

Thanks for the review!

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Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it :D

It is a writing style, but in this case it sounds a tad awkward. It's usually used for emphasis, which was not what I thought you were trying to do, ...

Thanks for the review! The setting descriptions do need work, I agree. I didn't want to over do it in the prologue, but if someone else noticed it too then ...

Thanks for the review!

A good way to fix that is to combine sentences. It just takes a lot of playing with the content to find a rhythm you like that sounds great. Another ...

I posted this real quick on my way to work and am about to actually take it down because I'm realizing I posted it wrong etc. Thanks for reviewing, I ...

Thank you for the review! :)

Thank you! :)

The difference between the two emotions is that upset is more of a mix of sadness, anger and anxiety. Its a PTSD- battle reaction thing for this character (since he's ...

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The show's called Soul Eater, it's actually an anime. Thanks for the review, I knew some parts sounded awkward but I wasn't really sure how to fix it. :)

Ahaha thanks! The dance part is supposed to be that Hailey is mopping and Aspen bumps into her. The relationship between her and Henry is supposed to be sort of ...