HereBeMonsters

Hey, hey, I'll deal with the nitty-gritty stuff first: pasting himself back and closing his eyes. Not sure what word you were really meaning by 'pasting'. click the soft sound ...

Hey there, I've read chapter one, and as it's been thoroughly reviewed and there's nothing else I can really add, I'll start with chapter 2. :D tick....tock...tick...tock... The grandfather clock ...

Ah, the plot thickens... I'm really enjoying the sense of mystery you are imbuing this story with, that there are so many characters with unexplained motivations and intentions, and it's ...

Hey there, I'll deal with the spelling and grammar stuff first. It truly was a beautiful veiw from up here, and I loved it. Needs to be 'ie' instead of ...

Hi there, welcome to YWS :D I'll get the nitty-gritty out of the way first: As Ryder walked solumly along the road through the alley,... It should be spelt 'solemnly'. ...

Hi, HereBeMonsters here and I'll be your reviewer for today. :D She wasn’t human—no far from it. Did you mean 'She wasn't human- far from it'? It's just that I'm ...

Hi again, From what you've added, I can only see a couple of spelling mistakes (At least I presume they're mistakes). She watched from her window as the gates were ...

Hi there, I'll get the spelling and punctuation stuff out of the way with first, before I move onto content: As I did I could hear the claws on the ...

I greatly enjoyed reading this story; a very well written version of the old fairy tale, with a few new twists thrown in for good measure. I liked the way ...

....O.K.... I've just read this act, along with the previous two, and I have... a few comments to make. First of all, the characters are more than a little one-dimensional, ...

I thought this was a really great prologue. It set the scene perfectly, beautifully described, you can really feel Aaron's (thought she was a he for a moment) agony as ...

I really enjoy your writing style, you've used some interesting similies- sandpaper on the menu, legs anchored by ball and chain- and you have created some vivid images using very ...

Hi there. Overall, I liked this different twist on the Little Red Riding Hood story. Being a bit pedantic with grammar, there a few little points I want to get ...

I very much enjoyed the open-ended way this story finished with the cliffhanger. Regarding the first reviewer's idea of adding more description of the characters' and setting's appearances, personally

Here we go, first post! I really enjoyed the simplicity of this story, as if these were the girl's final thoughts before her execution itself, which I think is helped ...