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....WOW! I'm not going to concentrate on technical stuff, don't even ask me to try, I was too enveloped in the actual story. This is...original. Different. New. Okay, I'll tell ...

Awrighty! You have a pretty good piece there, however a few errors! First off, this is how you start off :Welcome Sir, may I help you with anything?” and then ...

Wow, this is really cool! It sounds a bit like some sort of rap, especially the word 'piss'. Also, I like the fact that you brought Greek tragedy into it, ...

Wow that was actually pretty good =) I liked that it had, as you said, two meanings. I liked the idea that something can grown on its own,with no love, ...

Okay, here we go: She’s been my Bff for life ---> Just thought I'd point out that Bff = Best friend forever, so bff for life would read Best Friend ...

Great Pace. This is a scene full of tension from what I can tell, so pace would be important. Tension is presented well, too. There is also foreshadowing that is ...

Beautiful. Gripping. I don't know how else to describe it. I'm not very good at reviewing poetry, so I can't start nit picking at your techniques. However, this is absolutely ...

HAhhahahhaha, well it was funny, you definately achieved that, in fact I was laughing. I loved how ditzy you made Pink sound, and when she said 'I thought you were ...

It was an interesting read, actually. Good Job! A bit spooky if it's really true, but overall you've worked greatly with stimulus to create a good story. Cael seemed a ...

This is absolutely beautiful. The choice of words, the techniques used, everything is amazing. As I read it, I got that feeling in my chest that you get when you ...

I think it was a very sweet story, if a bit unrealistic. There weren't a lot of grammar errors that I could detect, but then again I'm hardly the Grammar ...

Tons of run-on sentences! Makes it hard to read! As for the actual story, it's kind of sweet in its own way, although it's nothing amazing. I would develop the ...

" If you look into behind my eyes you will see the truth and grief, see through my smiles" You should get rid of "behind" it makes more sense. There ...

That was so sweet.I totally loved it. The entire thing just kept you reading and wanting to find out more. It waa amazing. I'd definately like to read the rest. ...

Hey , my name is Stela and I will be reviewing your work. Just so you know, I suck at grammar, but I'll try and do my best on telling ...