It was an interesting read, actually. Good Job! A bit spooky if it's really true, but overall you've worked greatly with stimulus to create a good story. Cael seemed a bit shallow though, maybe you should try and make her more realistic by justifying why she wanted to go into the crypt. Also, it seemed a bit unrealistic that her boyfriend was mainly scared for her, if you show that he's scared for both of them and their well being, that wouldn't be selfish, just realistic. On the whole, it was a good story though! Good Job =)