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heard of bradbury, but haven't read any yet. mentioned hell 'cause he was dying and going there, i think, but i wrote this years ago so i don't remember. how ...

heard of bradbury, but haven't read any yet. mentioned hell 'cause he was dying and going there, i think, but i wrote this a year ago so i don't remember. ...

heard of bradbury, but haven't read any yet. mentioned hell 'cause he was dying and going there, i think, but i wrote this years ago so i don't remember. how ...

they've always had lasersss -- the laser guuunss and the reason for jason suddenly appearing, as far as i remember since writing this, is that he was gonna come down ...

ah, it was meant to be that he intended to select Dirk but looked up at the wyrm while he tapped the screen and accidentally selected Pompeii also yeah, 'sauntering' ...

Oh, yeah, sorry, that was supposed to be Jason emphasizing his words, but I don't really like it that way anymore so I'll switch it from italics. Also, I never ...

"To begin with, I'm sorry but I haven't read the previous chapters of your story" you can kinda stop right there oh, but you kept going "I'm honestly just a ...

Oh I forgot to change Jason's exclamation. Eughhh. thanks for the review, though :b

Ohhhhh!! Thank you for reminding me! I was just wondering about the language issues tonight, and was working out that various parts of the galaxy probably speak "Simple Tongue" aka ...

errr, could you clarify the 'plot' section of this review some more? i'm having trouble understanding what you're trying to say;-;

um. it's a spaceship. not a pirate ship. so it should be in space. and it's not like 'treasure planet', whatever that isss?

yeah, avery's a mess throughout, but particularly at the beginning. i'm still having trouble in chapter 20 with him reacting to things. i need to edit a ton to fix ...

the alien was mentioned in the previous chapter, soooo? i haven't re-read any of these since i wrote them, though, so i dunno if that's the first mention of jason ...

i do that post-dialogue thing a lot, though...

a couple bounces is surprisingly smoothly compared to how it was expected to land. first correction isn't right; you must be reading the sentence wrong. third correction isn't necessary either ...