Harley

This was really cool, chevy- great job. i agree with nite; that part did confuseme a little, but other than that its really awesome.

whoa this is excellent- i'm not into rap, but wow, these lyrics were amazing :shock: !

thanks, i worked really hard on this one

it's pretty good, yeah how long have you been writing? and how long have you been in your band? what instrument do you play? (i know, spanish inquisition much? lol)

short lines always seem to get your pont across better. pretty cool but it needs more of a strictr pattern if you want it to be "catchy"

yes, this is very encouraging... is there NOTHING good about this damn song?

Jack, this is brilliant. I love the long words, I love the detail, I love the "my clothes are dripping with excitement" part- i love everything. this is a fikkin ...

wow oh my god, it's freakin KICK ASS wow I have a whole tune for this in my head, jack you rock, hon, seriously, this is amazing, i love the ...

..? Well, it's not you who have written nothing :?

Well, considering the lines are: Grew up in a small town And when the rain would fall down I'd just stare outmy window how 'bout no? anyway, avril lavigne wrote ...

it's a bit short to critique, but verses would either make it or break it (forgive the cliched phrase) i'd love to read them, too.

I don't know if you've read many books that are in a diary format, but they all have direct speech in them, and quite a lot of it. It'd be ...

Thanks. It's a bit stereotypical, yeah, but i have this cool plot thingy I'm toying with, but it would need loadsa research and i'm, well, lazy.

Care to give me an example? It's a bit hard to understand... missed a beat or squished them together? :? It's just meant to be like a girls diary, startedon ...

Damn right! Making some little adjustments, I'm changing the format to a diary one because it'll be easier for me, and I've never really followed through with a diary story. ...