Harley

It's cool, but i agree with ohhewwo- needs a bridge. Whats your site address; i'd love to check it out?

I agree with Inertia; when you see the words "lonely path" and "walk alone" together, you immediately think of Boulevard. And what's with all the underlined verses?

It seems more like a poem than a song, to me, but it's very well written.

Thanks Nikki! So true about Fontroy- dude, you kinda need to write in plain english when you're critiquing- it's sorta annoying, to be honest. Thanks everyone your comments- they help ...

That bit is a contribution to the randomness of me :P I'm thinking of redrafting the chorus to: I wanna be What everybody thinks I'm not Jealousy I'm not popular ...

This was pretty cool. I love the idea- it's amazing and really original. are you going to continue it or just leave it as a short piece of writing?

i've been keeping them in mind when I've been writing my new songs- and i gotta say you guys are totally right! i like these new ones i did, though, ...

The point of the song was that the lines started off as "Tired of"- they're the verses. not many songs are like that, but it's meant to be that way. ...

wow- thanks so much!

so very confusing...

...if you've got time, read mt new songs- they're different, more personal and stuff

heh... i was down on myself yesterday this song totally SUCKS, though- i'll work on it

thanks. this was one of the first songs i wrote- the only one i liked at first. ive written a few, but the music is a bit sticky... i', getting ...

Okay- i've posted two new ones- ones i worked real hard on; ones that aren't a load of meaningless crap like you guys seem to think the first ones are. ...

huh? it's about a girl whose boyfriend pushes her around a lot and she's sick of it that post is extremely confusing