Hannah

A small camp fire crackles and spits within the depths of the woods, effervescing embers into the cold air of the night; each of which glows a brilliant vermilion before ...

This is going somewhere. This can be something with a little more work. The change of feeling doesn't need to be announced, because that's what you want the reader to ...

Woah, woah, woah, woah, woah. SLOOOOOOW DOWWWWN. It's clear from how much you have here that there is a ton of action going on. I was intrigued from the beginning ...

Hi, Molly. The first thing I think this poem could benefit from would be a clarification of voice. You're speaking about a "he", then you switch to just speaking about ...

So, I was happily surprised. I came here to BEG you to not stifle the words you want to say with a rhyme scheme, but I found that there was ...

I almost skipped over the important part. The transition between his dream and back to reality is the only thing that makes this piece worth reader, because it changes the ...

Hey, Sol. I like confusing when I write it. The last couple of pieces of short fiction I posted on here got everyone going "WHAT THE HECK IS GOING ON?" ...

Hey, AM! Well, I liked reading it. I didn't find myself having to stop because I got bored, so that's a good sign, and you set everything up really well ...

Hey, Jordan. I wanted to point something out to you, and I was able to find something to point it out clearly. Here: and my friend and she sat in ...

Hey, Lily. I love the images in this. I kind of like the idea of it, but I definitely think it needs a little work, too. After reading it and ...

Well, of COURSE I'm here for you~ So look at it this way. This poem is about watching the two princesses freeze to death. That can be beautiful. It is, ...

Hi, Cailey! So this is cute. I think the most vivid part about it is the setting that you give us. There are times when we can see exactly what ...

First of all, this is awesome. This is unique and what's especially great about it is that it's something that we can all connect to in some way. We live ...

Solvy! This is crazy! I wasn't expecting it. (: I'm not from 'here', neither from 'there'. What they call roads is not my place. So, first of all neither should ...

That's a really good evaluation of your own writing. Whenever you have a feeling like that, be sure you don't brush it off. I think the reason that this piece ...