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Old Scores. Very poorly written, and compared to the likes of Dave Pelzer's A Child Called It. I'm not one to talk, but the dialogue was horrendously fake. Also, The ...

Nitpicks: repulsion and attraction Repulsion from what? Attraction from what? It is not made clear enough early enough for this sentence to make sense. the tree branches Nitpicking, but what ...

A few things: his pile of fresh gray mush This confused me. What do you mean? What fresh gray mush? as he putted away in his Girl Should be "as ...

I clicked on this because of the title, since I'm a huge Buddy Holly fan, and was pleasantly surprised it was something unconnected, but brilliant. I enjoyed this. I also ...

This was great, with lots of suspense at the end! It left me wanting more, much more! A few things: It was my fifteenth birthday, and my friend had given ...

I read the first one shortly before moving on from my fantasy roots (a girl has to try out new things, right? I will return again some day, o'course!). I ...

I have to concur with what was said by the other two reviewers; this could really do with much more description. I found it hard to visualise what was happening ...

Your all late Should be 'You're all late'. You should really write in paragraphs, especially when characters start speaking. Not only does that apply as a grammatical rule, it makes ...

My name is Tara Greyfen and I was born on Earth in 1991. This is a bit of a no-no when it comes to stories. Really not a fan of ...