GrymmRipper

The next time I fold an origami crane, I'll extend it as token of friendship. The feel of this poem is one of eating cotton candy and laying on a ...

Very captivating. The fact that I can relate to the story and feel the character makes it even better. I would agree with wakegirl regarding the brother's dialogue. I can't ...

Just a tiny correction on the line from paragraph 2,"I didn't want *to".I could definitely pickup the emotions infused within the story. It gives off an impression that it's been ...

I believe you could tweak this poem a little more to make it perfect. 1- Your stanzas lack flow. I am able to see how each verse is connected to ...