GoldFlame

GoldFlame here for a quick review! I don't have much to say, because I absolutely loved it. Awesome hook! I was kinda going into it, like "This sounds pretty serious. ...

Thank you so much! I definitely get what you're saying, and I think that I'll work more on developing my characters (as well as establishing the time period)...

Hey, you're right--I never realized some of those things before :)! I'll edit the piece...and maybe think up a prologue?

Thanks, that was really helpful; I'll be sure to smooth things out!

Thanks, manisha! I'll definitely keep those comments in mind.

GoldFlame here, with some quick thoughts... It's great for your first time! I have to admit that I don't often review poetry, but I can give you some tips. I ...

Goldflame here with a brief review! I thought it was great overall, and the "Or so they thought..." added a nice touch to the end. There are only three words ...

GoldFlame here! I loved your piece. I was pulled in from the start, I have to say, and I wondered what it'd be like to stand in the narrator's place... ...

Thanks! I really appreciate the advice, and I'll be sure to edit the piece!

GoldFlame here with a review! Nice story overall! I enjoyed reading it, and I loved the ending. I just have a few things to comment on... To begin, you used ...

GoldFlame here with a review! Nice story overall! I enjoyed reading it, and I loved the ending. I just have a few things to comment on... To begin, you used ...