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Re: Lovely Ladies and the Capture [Part 9 Twelve Days Before Christmas] *Edited*
Hey, Deanie! Back again! She missed everything about home, even school. Having a little snippet of it out here in the woods was just what she wanted. Agh, it's little ...
Apr 21, 2014 -
Re: The Mad, Made-up Milking Maids (Part 2) [Twelve Days Before Christmas] *Edited*
Back again! Let me just say, it was brilliant to link eight maids a-milking and nine ladies dancing. (Although I suppose the song meant actual Middle-Age-type ladies, as the ensuing ...
Apr 21, 2014 -
Re: The Mad, Made-up Milking Maids (Part 1) [Twelve Days Before Christmas] *Edited*
Hey, Deanie! “Don’t be alarmed,” This is a kindness. :shock: Moving on! I grinned so much I think I tore my cheek muscles. Someone find a doctor! Or the Doctor. ...
Apr 21, 2014 -
Re: The Perfect Thief Chapter 1
Heya, Gaurav! Exquisite balance of show and tell. You know, they always encourage you to increase the "show" and cut down on the "tell," but just because a story contains ...
Apr 21, 2014 -
Re: rtyuio
Hey, fight4whatisright! Endless apologies for the delay. When I "like" a piece, I absolutely love it. On several occasions I've actually liked and then unliked stuff, having reexamined the piece ...
Apr 21, 2014 -
Re: In the Beginning (Part 0) [Twelve Days Before Christmas] *Edited*
Back again! This is ... wow. This just made my day. Oh, poor Santa ... I'm here for you, you know that? If you ever need a hug? :cry: And ...
Apr 13, 2014 -
Re: Exam Result
Hey, Gaurav! A little late, but here nonetheless. I review by reading the piece once (for pleasure) and then re-skimming it. I'm only mentioning this because I haven't re-skimmed it ...
Apr 11, 2014 -
Re: Four verses of sadness ( The man with no fare )
Back again! Sorry for the wait. :D Loved, loved, loved the AABB rhyme scheme. You wouldn't think it'd fit, but it locked right in like pieces of a jigsaw puzzle. ...
Apr 10, 2014 -
Re: Dawn of the Daughter of God, Pt. 1
Wow. My dear slave, you blew me away. You say you need assistance with grammar, but honestly, ignoring the occasional mistake ... it's impeccable. A lot better than most. And ...
Apr 10, 2014 -
Re: Diakrino- the darkness within (chapter 2)
Hey, Gaurav! Here as promised! I intended to write a lengthier review, but then I read the previous'... So the plot's assuming form. It was conveyed almost entirely through dialogue, ...
Apr 8, 2014 -
Re: Diakrino- the darkness within (Chapter 1)
Hey, Gaurav! A little late, but here nonetheless. You've established a strong base. Well-measured pacing: you zoomed in and out as needed. I also have to commend you on your ...
Apr 8, 2014 -
Re: My heart has a heart and it's broken
Heya, Inspirus! Amazed. Truly. The inconsistent rhyming lent the piece a delicious choppiness. In a way, it reflected the narrator's emotions: torn into shreds, then stitched together again by anger. ...
Apr 6, 2014 -
Re: Tolerance
You know I love your prose, so I had to check out your poetry immediately ;). I'm not tagging this a review, because I'm inexperienced. But not all poems possess ...
Apr 4, 2014 -
Re: "Happy Birthday, Fred."
This is the first time I've ever commented without nitpicking. And that's 218 reviews. I prefer this over Letters. Especially Ron's lines; Ron just rang Ron. A young writer's common ...
Apr 2, 2014 -
Re: Sorceress: Chapter 5
Hey, Aurora99! Squeezing in one last review! I dropped in at the fifth chapter, and I still enjoyed this. Well-measured pace, well-executed descriptions, well-chosen names. Gah. Just "well" in general
Mar 30, 2014