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Loved it! I saw you had no comments on your poem and after reading it, I couldn't figure out why. It's a brilliant poem, long but I wrote long poems ...

I see everything has already been corrected, so all I have to say is to try and shorten the amount of sylables in some lines. It does have a distinctive ...

Loved the rhythm, very good. Other people have already corrected what was wrong so all I have left to say is: fantastic poem, I love the feeling of it and ...

Very well done. At last I know I'm not the only one who writes such long poems. I loved it, of course. Very well done. Very intence. It conveyed alot ...

Wow, amazing poem, you must have worked very hard on it. It flowed well and your choice of words was great. I don't think I really need to correct anything, ...

Wonderfully written. It feels... soft. I don't know how else to put it, it's just soothing, about real love, real genuine love. Nothing dis-functional or anything like that, just soft, ...

I like this, it is kind of 'sing song'. Just a few corrections, and I added some punctuation. I want to write a love song to take your breath away ...

I like this but she does sound a little young, maybe it's just the use of the word 'momma' I do know alot of older teens who use the word ...