Galerius

Hi FazoliMoli123, FlyerS is telling you not to write a love poem because as demonstrated here, most of those written by people who can't do it right fail miserably. This ...

Hi antimelrose, Not bad. And yet... I don't know why this is happening, but for some reason, there's a new fad on YWS in which poets attempt to stuff as ...

Hi Conrad Rice, I am appalled. For one who ventured into serious poetry only a few months ago (as according to your own admission), your work has thus far been ...

Hi Rosey Unicorn, I don't know where to begin. Every part of this poem is either pretentious or undercooked, resulting in a blend of both that ails the appetite. Resting ...

Hi Elinor Brynn, I am no expert on haiku, but I can tell you that these poems all have tremendously wasted potential. Look over at me, Climbing up the maple ...

Hi angels-symphony, Holy... Throw this away. Just incinerate it. There's a difference between keep your child healthy and stuffing her full of water, ramming the garden hose through her shattered ...

Hi Kylan, This was good, but only because the parts of it that were excellent managed to outsprint those that were absolutely worthless and simply filler stuffed into the hollow ...

Hi Clo, Yeah... no. The more times I read this, the more mind-numbingly pretentious and sloppy it becomes in my mind. That's not something you want your reader to feel. ...

Hi LiveScreamWriting, This isn't doing anything for me. It's a compilation of Disney-channel themes and outright bad writing that makes for one very boring, very foggy poem. Maybe if I ...

Hi spring616, You had better be planning to go somewhere with this piece even though it's a year old; otherwise, we're all wasting our time. I want to make you ...

Hi Matt Bellamy, Congratulations, you know what anger is. Are you expecting to... receive something from this poem? Anything at all? Because right now this is just a dead husk ...

Hi Kamas, Beautiful. There are rough parts to this, to be sure, parts that made me want to put away the poem. But after every such line is another that ...

Hi xoxo, Thank you so much for telling me my mistakes, I'll improving and reading more, and soon you'll be seeing my books soon world wide ;) No I won't. ...

Hi HannahDutson_x, I did this in about 2 minutes, but what do you think? I think you need to spend more than two minutes on a poem that you post ...

Hi Jasmine Hart, I've seen too few birds these past two weeks. The robins came, of course, because they love me, or because they are drawn to sorrow and need ...