Galerius

Hi retrodisco666, After reading the first two lines, I actually thought that this was going to be a decent poem. I quickly realized how wrong I was. Your two main ...

Hi AmberAngst, When I look through the cookie rack at my workplace's cafe, there are biscuits that are fresh and doughy and ones that you can immediately point out as ...

Hi Kamas, I already know what you're doing right, and you already know what you're doing right, so let's get down to the finer points of what makes this poem ...

Hi Way2Dawn, Listen to brainychic212. Usually, I hardly comment on punctuation within poems because it is the least important quality of a work, but here things are different. As she ...

Hi Lava, I expect you to lose that contest, because this isn't good writing. This story seemed like it was so hastily formed that not only did you forgo any ...

Hi Kamas, An anthrogram of good luck charms you searched for carried in a Bible matchbox. In your threaded pockets, with the penny that you found. But good luck hasn't ...

Hi ziggiefred, [i]I wrote this poem because I was feeling betrayed by everyone around me (I'm fine now :D ). It basically talks about my idea of a 'home' from ...

Hi Confused.pirate, Yeah, this is bad. The introduction wasn't needed; it's obvious to anyone with a cerebrum that you wrote it without paying the words much thought or care. It's ...

Hi antimelrose, Apologies for the late review. I have been bogged down in other affairs for the last few days. Now: This is disjointed. Overusing metaphors is only making you ...

Hi PenguinAttack, First things first. This immediately put me off because of the fact that you use too much... pseudoimagery, as I call it. You describe a term, place, or ...

Hi spike71294, She vents out her feelings by dancing and by the end she is reformed, kinda like a new birth for her. The phoenix was a metaphor! Gosh people ...

Hi LastPaladin, Winnie603 is absolutely correct. This plays out like a story but without all of the benefits of pure prose. You take sentences and break them in half every ...

Hi papersolstice, I am shocked that this sorry thing got five stars and is featured. Of course, is not your fault, but do know that apparently the reflections of most ...

Hi praisejoe, So what's the celestial task? All you do is ramble on about a vague feeling and leave it at that. And don't get me wrong - it can ...

This is a poem I wrote on the spot. I hope you guys like it! Quick hint. When you write a poem "on the spot", chances are you haven't invested ...