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Galerius

  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: An examination of human life

    What is life, but a collection of strife carried on right through the years what is death, But just a final rest an ending of those tiresome tears? Not much ...

    Dec 11, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: American Love

    Where did the American love go? It was a simple love. I used to know it once, I think. The second line implies that today's love is still love, although ...

    Dec 10, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: photons, excite!

    look at me and rejoice! see my hair, how it sparkles in the sun and transforms into spindles of gold for you Sounds a little like self-depreciating romance poetry. I ...

    Dec 6, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: alone

    There is nothing here I am all alone In this dark place of my own creation Surely there's a better way you can describe this abyss beyond saying "the dark ...

    Dec 5, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Creep- Chapter 4

    It did not take Creep one day to heal his wounds. For three months he stayed in Concetta’s room as he recovered, trying not to move too much lest he ...

    Dec 5, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Creep- Chapter 3

    The waking world returned to Creep in a blinding flash of light like some divine revelation. He put his hand over his eyes, trying to protect them from the brilliance. ...

    Dec 5, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Sardines

    I couldn’t remember What had happened earlier That day. My head was Throbbing, but my body Was numb. I forced my Eyes open, tearing apart The film that had formed ...

    Dec 5, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Love

    Love shows through your eyes and burns through my heart It’s a feeling hard to deny Bold and happy I'm disappointed; I expected an analogy to the sun or some ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Creep- Chapter 2

    Creep slunk through the sewers. The noxious smell of human waste entered his nostrils and he grimaced in disgust. He didn’t need to go far down here, just far enough ...

    Dec 2, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Do Not Stand By My Grave And Weep

    Although I'm there Although I sleep ... Although I'm there Although I died Interesting parallels between sleep and death; however, considering that this is from a existentialist standpoint, does sleep

    Dec 1, 2008
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: House-revised

    Since this seems to focus on an idea - concept, really - more than actual conventions, I am not going to concentrate on the mundane aspects such as language, word ...

    Dec 1, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Creep- Chapter 1

    Hi, Conrad. Your work has caught my eye a couple of times and I figured I should start critiquing some of it eventually. So here goes: It could have been ...

    Nov 30, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: My Rant About How Stephenie Meyer Annoys Me

    Do you seriously want this to be critiqued? You sound exactly like - and I mean exactly like - Twilight fangirls. The same arrogant tone, the same juvenile word choice, ...

    Nov 30, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Do You?

    Well, at least you admitted upfront that this poem wasn't any good. This was...a train wreck of cliches colliding with one another to infinity, sorry. I have heard this poem ...

    Nov 29, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: .

    The blood of life is in the movement, The blood of movement is in the dance. Each flick of a finger tells a story, Woven together in movement's trance. Imagery ...

    Nov 29, 2008


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— Isabel Quintero