Gadi.

"getting in my nerves" *on* "I kicked him yesterday. I did." Haha! I like this, it's like we don't believe you, but when you say "I did" we do. Wow, ...

Over the wind and rain, a faint cry of pain and sorrow could be heard. A faint cry of pain and sorrow could be heard over the wind and rain. ...

This was really interesting! Couldn't find any mistakes. Actually, I have biology for period one too, and I found a lot familarities (ouch spelling) between what I think and what ...

Good job! Watch your punctuation though. You forget where you put them sometimes! "three bombs went off in a small park but this was no ordinary bomb" three bombs went ...

"The clearing floor was covered in deep, velvety moss that echoed the majestic color of the foliage above. " Delete majestic (show, not tell) and put something else. Otherwise the ...

As you please, you wonderful oaf! You really caught my attention with all the details of his bathroom. Maybe just mellow down as you go along on them, so it ...

I loved it! I don't really think the review above really focused on the things in this poem I found important (sorry guys!!!). So, here are my ideas, all anotized ...

I READ IT! OMG, I actually finished it this THURSDAY! I am watching the movie tomorrow! Here's my view on it: The first three-fourths were kind of too deep and ...

Good job! I didn't really like the line breaks, until I saw that THEY LOOKED LIKE A TORNADO TOO! Like this -------------------------------- ------------------------ --------------- ------ -- -

WOW! Excellent story there! I loved it. The character, the background, the description...nice. Two things: She leans on walking stick less and less and her mind wanders on the walking ...

Okay, I will be doing this as I go. Kyle noticed this two. *too. since Hayley was a sister to him "like a sister to him", please. Otheriwise, too close ...

Confusing! But I can see potential. Are the characters sheep? Is that what you are trying to do? Because if it is, maybe you should keep that till the end, ...

I really liked it! At first I thought the story was about a nobody man, somebody who is alone and doesn't know anybody, isn't friends with anybody, and is really ...

Hey! I am criticquing this as I read along, so please don't be mad at me. multi-storey Should be multy-story, but maybe apartment building is better. However she was keeping ...

Wow! I really, really liked this! It was....superb at the least. I agree with everyone above me: the plot and the characters were so excellently crafted! The first part was ...