Funkymomo

The poet, walking slowly under the thin not a very discriptive word. Try light mist of drizzling rain, climbed the rocky road that led up the cliff. He was mentally ...

Wow. That was really good! You put good emotion into It at the beginning and didn't let the character cry about her mom the whole time. You added depth of ...

I liked it- mostly. I feel you ruined it in the last line. You change the poem from questioning life and thinking about the world to love. I doesn't seem ...

Very good. I was interested reading it, even though it followed the common 'magic portal' storyline at the start you managed to change it up. I suggest making your main ...

Hi. I had a hard time understanding your story. It's to short to have more than two characters, in my opinion. I had to read it very carefully to understand ...

I liked it, but I think you had short sentences some times. read it through and add a few commas. You remembered to put in old time language which was ...

Nice-second person, I like it. It's hard to write a story in second person. Although, I didn't feel like there was a point. Maybe talk a bit more about the ...

How do I get through this I no longer know where my heart is The poem's great exept for this. I don't feel like THIS and IS rhyme. Maybe you ...

It's very good, deep and personal too. I didn't see anything wrong with grammar, but hat's just me. My friend writes that way and he's one of the best writers ...

I liked it. The only part I had a problem with was "I can't leave this room." I don't know why but I feel it kind of pulled away from ...