Funkymomo

It was pretty dramatic, and don't be offended, a bit cliche. A twist happening in there would liven the story up a bit, but to me at least, it's just ...

Hey, this was great! there weren't any awkward places and you had a great flow. You used great words throughout, you conveyed the story well. I noticed some great vocabulary! ...

And to the terror for which it speaks a rolling bellow now beseaks decide if you want it to capitalize every line or put punctuation For pain that makes the ...

Sorry it took me to long, Kafka, I was skiing at a no internet place. I really liked it! Not once did I read a sentence that didn't make me ...

The thing felt kind of twilightly to me. Golden eyes, Victoria. I'm sure you didn't mean it to be that way! :) I don't think you did a god job ...

Good job, you have a good rhythm here, just a few mistakes already pointed out. Very deep words, but ti's kind of hard to understand. I'm not much of a ...

you copy cat. Anyways, this isn't a novel because you can submit something as a novel and you didn't it's also really short, get someone's advice on how to post ...

Sitting here, in this empty room Wishing you were here, with me I think I've heard those lines before, just got de ja vu. Wishing you were here, with me ...

Ok, problem, I sung it to myself like a pop song, and it sounded OK! But it turns out you were doing something too- AWK as Gamache would say. Awkward ...

I love this! I don't like the poetry that's so in depth you can't understand it, so this is perfect! Possibly using more descriptive words at points would be good, ...

This was marvelous! I was skeptical at first when I understood that James was a rock. I believed that silly, crazy, unrealistic things would happen, but you did a great ...

I haven't read those, books, but my cousin recomended them and if they're anything like what you wrote, I really want to read them! You display your characters personalities well, ...

HAHAHAHAHAHA why wasn't I in it? GRRR. You have a good groove going, and it's easy to read, but it needs more of a point. this could be more of ...

This is a bittersweet poem- I love it! It's so sad, yet you feel a little happy too. I like how you describe the bird and choose one spect about ...

-The Confessions of a Chronic Liar- My name is Jasmine Brandon . I’m 15 years old and I am a chronic liar. My whole life is a lie. I tell ...