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Thank you for having the rating set a little lower. And I'm so sorry for not being on to review this yet! Oh, please forgive me! But as I was ...

Hey, it's me again! So sorry I haven't reviewed this yet. Here we go! “Do not die.” She commanded. First, the period should be a comma. And she shouldn't be ...

Excellent job! This was a great heartwarming story. And sorry for not noticing your reply in my thread sooner...hehe, I'm not able to get on as much anymore, though it's ...

Geez, how many Furuba fans are out there? The world is coming to an end...! No, just kidding. :P Thank you for the reviews on my stories! I need to ...

Intense! I'll say that. And it was very short. Very short. There's a major overuse of the word 'I' when it comes to beginnings of sentences in your story. Just ...

Hi Pen! I'm not sure this belongs in Fantasy, but I'll review, anyway! Punctuation errors. I noticed a lot of those, involving misused commas and missing semicolons/hyphens/etc. Almost all the ...

OK, here I am, yet again! Now where's my hug...? :twisted: (Just kidding! :P) First thing--wow! Great improvement on grammar! I only spotted one teeny-tiny error. Good for you! *claps* ...

Sorry I have delayed so long. Anyway, here I am! :) Some of the grammar mistakes have already been mentioned, so I'll skip those. “What’s going on out here?” yelled ...

Hi Pen! I'm so glad to see you're already a part of YWS! :P First off--I noticed several grammar mistakes. I hadn't had much problem trouble figuring out which bookstore ...

Whoa. :shock: That. Was. Intense. Perfect, Sara thought. Thoughts should be italicized, going with your consistent format from before. Perfect, Sara thought. Same thing. “Then I hope you don’t min

Hi, it's me yet again! Very interested in this series...please continue. :) (she had said a total of 18 words during her entire time at the school.)But Sara assumed she ...

Ooh, creepy. Definitely mysterious as well! :) First off-- Closet, there. Inside, safe. I think you can take out 'there'. Personally, 'Closet. Inside, safe.' sounds a lot better to me! ...

Hi, Nutmeg! Here I am again. :) Behind an eternal veil of darkness, shrouded in a world of ceaseless night , there stood a castle. Please add in the bolded ...

Wow! I'll say that was really good! :D certain of what to draw -- yet at the same time, I'd advise adding the hyphen in there. Without it, this part ...

Hi. :) Since you asked for more reviews, and I really liked the 1st part, here I am! :P I’m supposed to give you a tour?” She asked Change she ...