FreakyDoo12

Ok, I feel like I am incredibly late to review since everone's done the job but overall I like it. There was a few gramatical error which was pointed out ...

Each day I hide the real me from the outside, A different me, a side that you don't know about. I'm wearing masks so you won't see the person, Who ...

Ok, what will I say, this definately sounds like a heart breaking poem- most of it has been corrected but erm I could add something else, yes. you could try ...

Ok, only one person reviewd this so I've jumped onto it. It was quite impressive for a prologue, as stolen hearts mentioned you are a wonder ful writer. I can't ...

I liked it personally, I started reading it and I got gripped onto it. People are now going to compare peopel meeting at school as Twilight!! A love stroy is ...

What the hell!!! i DISAGREE, THE REPITITION IS TOO MUCH, i MEAN TO ME PERSONALLY. IN GENERAL PEOPLE WANT TO READ AN INTERSTING STORY, REPITITION JUST MADE ME BORED. ANYONE ...

Ok, I will try to make this sound less harsher. You've done very well in bringing the characters to life especially with the mouse and I'll totally let you of ...

Nice work!! Inform me when you mange to publish your story. But I've got a few questions to ask, is any of the characters based on you or any one ...

Hey, I loved it actually but I agree with the above reader about some stanza's been unneccessary. I know how hard lyrical writing is cos I've tried it before but ...

I totally agree with everyone. it sounds like a good story but since it is dialogue every speaker's suppose to start a new sentence. maybe you could re type it ...

ERM, i totally adore twilight and I've read that book about a thousand times, I'm not afraid to admit it but doesn't it sound quite like a scene in one ...