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Hello Lauryn! I'll be your reviewer for today. I am really attracted to these kinds of stories and so I was really excited to read this. Nitpicks I shivered and ...

Hello wolf! You have reviewed my stories so I shall review yours! Alright so, I didn't see any nitpicks. But, I didn't get it. You jumped forward seventeen years, but ...

Hey horsegirl! You review my stories so I should review yours! I am not much for nitpicks, and I didn't really see any. I loved this! I am a big ...

Hello Honey! I'm here to review your work today! Nitpicks It started in the basement. It’s cliché, because everything always starts in the basement. This memory though, is as alive ...

AQUA! Hi. This was super amazing, but I totally agree with Firestarter. Make a strong narrator, I know its short, but perhaps you could maybe say how he was brought ...

This was amazing. You'll get through it, I know you will. Just be strong and remember, you'll always have people who love you. :) Keep your chin up and smile. ...

Ohmygosh! This was amazing! Sadly, I don't have any pointers, but I guess that is good news for you. Your descriptions were great, your grammar solid, and you totally made ...

Wow...this was good. I loved how you used repition, it made an impact on the reader. Emotion was displayed very well and I could feel your feelings and emotions. The ...

Wow...this was amazing. It was so powerful, and I could feel the anger and emotion you put into it. I could almost hear the voice and the music. It was ...

Hey! Great writing, this seems like an interesting story and I hope to read more. I also liked the way you did the dialouge, I could tell you did that ...

Hello Warrior Princess! I'll be your reviuewer for today! Well, you've got a nice set of Haikus here. Throughout them, you have great imagery and rythm. I love how you ...

Hello I'll be your reviewer for today! Oh and Welcome to YWS! OKay, so I'm not much of a critiquer on poems, but this was pretty good. Do you write ...

Hey Seeker! I'll be your reviewer today (since I know about AVID class xD and this seems interesting!) Okay, I don't have any nitpicks. This is well written, and I ...

Hello Thilan! Welcome to YWS, I'll be your reviewer today! (Haha, I couldn't help but read this, we had just read a legend about Sir Gawain in class! How ironic?!) ...

Hello cherry343, Welcome to YWS! I'll be your reviewer for today! Nitpicks sliding the letter in he closes my top, Try: "sliding the letter in, he closes my top," Joined ...