Flemzo

It was well written, but not my cup of tea (whatever that means). I loved the irony at the end about the clichés. I don't know if you meant for ...

I'm with Claudette on the punctuation thing. I'm not used to not having little dots and dashes telling me how to read it. That, and the apostrophe before "'cello" kind ...

I'll admit, I was lost throughout the poem. It could be because I know next to nothing about chemistry (I blame my teachers and my ease of distraction), it could ...

Um... What happened? Why was the girl shot? Who shot her? We need reasons as to why this happened rather than it just happening . There really was no plot, ...

I must say, the ending surprised me; I was totally not expecting the maps to be people! I thought it was a legend of some sorts, and Tim was to ...

Your story caught my attention, but I was bored with it fairly quickly. I liked the air of mystery with him burying the box, and I was expecting a return ...

Woo. Short. This could definitely use some expansion. What exactly did the narrator do to make him/her think this way? There definitely seems like there's a backstory that we need ...

My first question was going to be "Why do you have "Secondhand" in parentheses in nearly every paragraph?" Then I saw your works cited at the end. I'll refrain from ...

Oh my.... I saw the story's length and immediately thought "tl;dr". But I was hooked from the beginning. The story-line was something I normally wouldn't get into, but your characters, ...

Bah, global warming is still a "nut-head idea", as you called it. The Earth goes through phases of global warming and global cooling. We just happen to be in an ...

My only qualm is the quote from Max at the end: “Team sports are over rated, in wrestling when you win, it’s because you’re just better than the other person. ...

I started reading this, got to this line: BRADLEY Since you’re older, you’ll die first. ... and literally LOL'd. I used this line in first grade on a girl I ...

I like the switching between the past and the present. Such a sad story, too. The one place that kind of tripped me up when reading it: It seemed like ...

Stop it you guys. The poem my sound boring, but it is good. It talks about an experiance many of us can relate to. While this is true, many MORE ...

Sad story, but a good story. And like Snoink said, mention that she started smoking. It seems like the cancer just comes out of nowhere. Also, I think a little ...