FinalFreedom

First of all, I would like to say that this is a wonderful piece! I would definitely love to see more. I could barely find anything to nitpick ^.^ His ...

This story was very interesting indeed, but I agree with the above user. At times, a writer can be "inspired" by a movie or other story and want to write ...

I hate to be harsh, but this story didn't really pull me in. It was all just on big info-dump, you told us everything instead of showing us through character ...

You are offcially my hero LOL I despise Twilight; mostly because I'm one of those hard to find teenage girls that hates anything that "fangirls" crush over. (E.G.- Robert Pattison, ...

Oh, herro! (Okay, back to normal mode I go!) Alrighty, here's my review :D (P.S.- I'm not sure if you know who this is or not, but if you don't ...

I'll probably just be repeating some stuff, but I"ll give you a review anyways :) I could see myself walking over to where he stood, but it felt more like ...

First of all, good job on your first fantasy! Now to the review. Joanna looked around the vast chamber that imprisoned her. The survivors huddled in small groups around her. ...

I must comment on the sentence structure. The story itself was well written and well played out, but I noticed too many periods where comma's could have been. It is ...

Okay, first of all, my apologies if this seems rude or mean. I'm going to be frank. I was completely bored and uninterested as soon as I read the first ...

Over all, it sounds pretty cool. Now for the review. Basically what the other two said lol, but there were places in here which sentences were dragged on where they ...

Hello there :) First of all I would like to say welcome since you have only been here for a day, so...WELCOME!!!! :P Now, to the critique. I would like ...

You definitely gave the scary effect there hehe. You also made me laugh, a lot, and that is often quite hard to do. I got the impression the boy was ...

Overall good plot. Though, I do have some of constructive criticism for you. First of all, I agree with abhove poster. Instead of making your "parts" long with small amounts, ...