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Wow, that was great :) you had great rhyming, and spelling. a few parts were confusing. but overall, i got the feeling of like death or something... is that what ...

I had a hard time understanding what point you were trying to get across, until the last sentence. "I'm drowning in this love sea" that was really creative, i could ...

That was really cool. I love the way you worded things, it made me feel like i was part of the poem or something. You might want to consider making ...

um... good job with the onomonopiea (however you spell it) but maybe you should try adding actual words, and adding emotion to your poem. like, make a central message, not ...

okay, this should be fun! my first review!!! Anyway, it was very good. It's like, your own way of explaining something. And it was very well written. Yes, it was ...

Its a really great poem. Doesn't go too deep into emotion, but gets the point across. I think if you showed this poem to someone, they'd definately understand what you ...