Fellow

The view was beautiful, as the sun was just rising from the east, and as it hit the snow making a bright and beautiful glow. I sighed looking at the ...

Great story... I didn't get the "Death's just another milestone in my life...Nothing to be worried about." - Just the author`s words? I would recommend to describe Adrian a little... ...

Ok I like the idea - writing a poem at the start of every chapter but as Chevy said its better to prose. Aspecialy if there`s something about light and ...

The review is coming up: Do you love me with your heart,/Or love me with your eyes? Strong and simple. Nice. Was i cute from the start,Or did you listen ...

First. Very nice idea. Second - the review: 1.) The title doesn't match the actual poem. 2.) I dream a dream where dreams have dreams/And dreamers never die-- Nothing to ...

For the first piece of fantasy it`s quite good. But i got some tips to point out. 1.) To "release" that feeling of fantasy, magic, of a world that it`s ...

For the love of God!... As no one here actually want to help you i`ll try to work something out of this poem. I feel like a bird - So ...

Very nice. Not many rhymes... The birds whisper their goodbyes /to the bowing trees/As they shield the leaves which dance in pairs /From the winter. The birds whisper their goodbyes/ ...

Ok... Amazing! I was holding my breath as i was reading. I`ll go at my school and always look over my shoulder from this day forward. It`s very sad that ...

Great job. The review ... but the devil's road is still in sight. I would change it in But I know the devil`s wrath - gives an extra rhyme and ...

Cheers! Nice ... I must admit this is very nice. Great idea but i would rather change a little To love, trust or just bow to. To love, to trust, ...

He probably did not notice it. You scared the poor bloke. He`ll probably never write again. The dialogue. Fine. Check spelling and the things that Lord pointed out and from ...

Very nice idea... The poem is very alert and it finishes very quick. The verbs, rhymes are fine but i would suggest the punctuation to be changes as the person ...

Well it`s not very much to say. The idea is good but many would prefer to make it bigger o.O . Speak about how he got in that situation. Why ...

Ok here we go! 1) Describe more of the feeling that Remus gets when he sees the shadow. Ok he saw animals before. "The form of the shadow was human-like. ...