Fauste

There is no way to indent on this forum that I know of. You might want to ask one of the Mods though, but I doubt it. Now onto the ...

I have to agree with emotion_less, it seemed hurried and needed more spice in the vocabulary. Other than that, reformat so it's easier to read here. I think you will ...

First thing, on formating, make it so it's not double spaced on lines. It makes it hard to read, and it looks wierd. Secondly, the rhyming in some places seemed ...

As Matt said you need to fix your italics. Other than that, I really like the sort of vagueness that this poem exudes. Your imagery is as my girl would ...

This for some reason reminded me of something Sylvia Plath would have written. It is very Lawrentian to me. I like it, maybe that's just me in my morbidity. I ...