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I see you've abandoned it but I got to say...spirit caller sounds pretty cool. And you've got really good names, keep them (that's what I did ;))

Thanks Esme ;). Yes, I'm not very good with commas. Bane to my writing they are. And Elayna does know how to fly, sort of... EDIT: Not wanting to clog ...

As it is from Michaels P.O.V, you might need to get rid of some of the longer words. But you said that it switches to someone else's soon and then ...

Oh, biscuit tin. That might explain a lot. Thanks gyr for making me realise a big mistake. It's probably too late but that's somethign to remember for teh future. Just ...

This was a very enjoyable piece. I feel sorry for the clown; imagine making that speech and then being laughed at? Are you writing more of these...ah, wait yes you ...

Oh, I see you've reached popular topic status, well done! I think that's a first for a story.

Ah, I didn't realise that there was a prologue. My bad, ignore it, I think it's ok as that sort of detail. As for changing the font I'm not sure, ...

Thanks for all of your opinions. Made some minor changes as some of you suggested. I'll have part 2 up by the end of the week.

Ah, about the point with armour. In this world, battle technology has taken a strange twist. To avoid any more misunderstandings, I suppose I should talk about porting. Porting is ...

Lol. Nice song. Found it a bit hard to sing at points but I thought it generally reflected your character.

Hi, I haven't read the other chapters but this one loosk quite good. I liked it because you can write Wyes' 'lost boy' character pretty well and your developement looks ...

Are you sure? Can’t you be dream ,” Colin mumbled trying to pull his covers a little higher. There's a letter missing here. He as falling, wind flushing by his ...

I liek this. At first I thought it was haiku then after some headbanging I remembered Haiku has less lines (I think). Its a bit too short to crittique really ...

Thanks for the crits. Especially you Kool, I owe you one. I can't say i've heard of maximum ride but I'll check it out. Yours Truly. FA

Thanks for the crits. :) I was going by what Rita Skeeter said (I hate the woman but she turned out to be right). She said that Dumbledore's and Grindelwald's ...